A challenge on Raw Em0tion recently was to submit a poem that had 5 or more alliterative lines. Here is my submission:
I never knew
You never were
And hated hearing empty words
Feeling every emptiness
Like bitter bounds of joy
I never knew
You couldn’t be
Something that meant more to me
Another status quo, it seems
I never knew you were.
Tuesday, 19 February 2008
I never knew, You never were
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6 comments:
You suit depressing stuff well lol...tis a good poem :) x
lol thankies
I love this poem and the neat, compact directness of it, plus the intensity of the feelings -- it's brilliant. And I really like the way you beautifully repeated the line "I never knew" in such a way that tells a complete story from "never were" to "couldn't be" to "were" -- this was really powerful and creative.
:)
Thanks :D that means a lot
Like the other said- good poem, hreat use of repeatition to achieve different effects.
thank you very much
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